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he and other one by *EmptyShadow:iconEmptyShadow:



There was once a senior. He was tall and smart one and other was a big and mean one. They didn’t like each other so much. So they fought. They hated each other after. They fought many times, but it only lasted seven days.

At the first day of school,
He went to the hall of trophy with a glass door and saw the other one. He opened the door and dropped all the trophies on the other one.

The second day,
He went to the bathroom and saw the other one. The other one punched him in the face. The other one hit so hard that the hand broke and bled. He fainted gasped in much pain after the punch.

The third day,
He went to the boy’s locker so he can change his clothes. He was looking at a mirror to adjust his shirt when he saw the other one. So he threw a basketball, which bounced off the wall and hit the other one. The other one’s nose broke and so he yelled at him. He left the boy’s locker as the other one ran away.

The fourth day,
He was going home from school. He was going to open his car door and drive. The glass window was very smudgy and dirty. So he decided to clean it with his shirt when he saw the other one. The other one swung a baseball bat at him; the glass shattered and cut his face. Someone outside ran to the other one to stop him. Several other people ran to see what was going on. He looked at his car with broken window, and started to cry. He ran away crying and the other one broke free and ran away too.

The fifth day,
He was very angry because his car was ruined. But it was a day where he had to take his history test. He went to sit on his daily sit. The other one was sitting on it. So he got pissed, but he took the test anyway. He was a tidy and clean person, so he cleaned his desk while taking the test. The other one kept asking why he’s being so clean, so he responded, “it keeps me concentrated”. The other one started to get pissed because he was getting too obsessed with cleaning. The other one scratched his arm with his pencil. The teacher saw it and gave him a hard slap on his head. The other one rubbed his head in pain and he tried to rub his stinging scratch.

The sixth day,
They met again in the bathroom. They despised each other so much after the five day fight. The tall one teased how the other one is so stupid and fat. The other one teased how he know-it-all smart ass.
“I heard that you killed your brother” the other one teased.
“it was an accident” he responded.
“So much for mature smartass, haha” the other one laughed.
“I’m mature! I just couldn’t take my brother’s annoyance…that is all” he started to whimper.
“ha, what a brother you are”
“Shut up, it was an accident I said”
“Doesn’t matter, you still need to be punished”
“Why are YOU punishing me? You have nothing to do with my brother”
“well let’s say I can be one of your karma, besides, I hate you anyway”
He was slammed into the wall, but he pushed back and started punching. He missed every shot, and only thing he did was hitting the mirror. Other one backed away and gasped for air, for his knuckles were all bruised from hitting the mirror. In a short moment the class bell rang. He exited the bathroom quickly and so did the other one.
“I am not finished with you yet” other one whispered.

The seventh day,
He and the other one met outside in the field. The other one cracked his knuckles and was ready to fight. Suddenly he reached into his pocket and took out a knife. The other one looked at the knife and said,
“No way man…this is crazy…let’s not do this…it might get ugly” he kept staring at the knife.
“No, it must be done and I will do it, don’t tell me what to do” He spoke in a dark voice. The other one quickly ran to the bleacher and climbed as high as he can. He swung his knife but the other one caught him and banged his head on the rails till he dropped the knife. After several hits he was dizzy and was unable to focus. The other one grabbed the knife and swung the knife at him, which cut him badly on his arm.
The other one stabbed him several times in the chest, and at some point he stabbed the heart. He gasped for air when it started bleeding, coughing and gagging.
With all his power, he stood up and ran toward the end of bleacher. He bashed into the other one and they both fell from the high bleacher, smashing into the ground together.

He and the other one lay on the ground, not moving an inch. He died from blood loss. The other one died of broken bones. The senior died of blood loss and broken bones.

The fight ends.
©2006-2009 *EmptyShadow
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Author's Comments

when you read a story
it always sounds different when you read it the second time

hope you enjoy my story
took one hour..not too long

but it did give me a lot to think about
You'll get what I mean by the end of the story.......

ignore my grammer mistakes...I ain't perfect

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:iconritishique:
Thats really deep, I can undestand that he loaths himself.
Great peice and very emotinal.

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:iconpotato-ness:
Wow...


I love it... It's pretty deep. I'm going to fav it because I know I could never do something like this.
And because it just plain is so cool...
Made me think for once n___n

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:iconblackrainfall:
that's so cool. if you read it again you realise he's havig battle with himself.

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Kenny Killed...Death. That...Bastard?

That was so awesome I think the image has been permanently burnt into my corneas.
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That's a good story, if you wrote it yourself (which I assume you did), I'm impressed :)

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:iconangelkittycat1992:
Wow. This is amazeing. you did great work on this.
:iconrentiris:
Wow. That was deep. It only took you an hour? Wow. It all makes sence now. That is some great writing.

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:iconhentekomekura:
Great work. Amazing.

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:iconcyanzack:
Thats a great story.

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How could you go on living, knowing everything you do is a waste of time?
:iconzeechan:
oo now i understood it when you said "the senior died of blood loss and broken bones." o.o

that was a nice story. 8D it reminded mf of KH2 tho, but this one with violence.

i would so hate to have a dark shadow like his. ;o;
:iconpiripanda:
Hahah, got it the first time, no problem. It's a nice story, well, kinda of expect something like that could happen when you struggle with the guilt of killing your brother. Besides seems like he hadn't to many people around who he could rely on, never got any help, and it should be very weird looking someone fighting with himself... like fight club ^^;

Nice story!! good work ^^

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